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I thought I had the words down,
thought I could condense my feelings
into five lines of angry poetry -

I didn't know that letting things out
leaves space in your heart for things like
love, things like anger, things like
five a.m. Facebook arguments
where all you want to do is
hold the person on the other side of the screen
and say I'm sorry,
    I'm so, so, so sorry;

I didn't know that letting things out
leaves space in your heart for things like
forgiveness,
    forgive me,
    forgive us,

we didn't know that letting things out
leaves space in your heart
to grow together, not apart,
we didn't know loving could be this hard,
    we didn't know it sometimes helps
    to chain your monsters up and call it art,
we didn't know,
we didn't know,
    we didn't know we could get this far.
A small, stand-alone segment of a larger poem, meant to be read out loud. Wrote this feeling hopeful but also a little bit sad and angry and just a tad crazy. 

First poem in a long while; and I'm experimenting with writing poetry specifically to be read out loud, which is why some of it may look strange on the page. 

For reference, this is my poem called Atlas
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mintybreeze Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
I had trouble thinking of how to comment this. this is justThis is really lovely and it's just so honest. I could feel all these emotions and connect to them, the pacing is great and I justIjustImean really love this. The spaces in between the words and indents really link well back to the theme of spaces.
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neonsquiggle Featured By Owner May 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
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Aww, thank you so very much, dear! You don't know what this means. I did work very hard on this poem and I'm happy to see that it's well-received. 
Your support is greatly appreciated!

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SereneCyrene Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Student General Artist
What a nice, thorough piece. :floating:
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neonsquiggle Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, your support is too kind. 

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SereneCyrene Featured By Owner May 1, 2014  Student General Artist
Sure thing. ^_^
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KJHartnett Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Holy crap this is amazing!!
I especially love this part: "I didn't know that letting things out
leaves space in your heart for things like
forgiveness, 
    forgive me
    forgive us,"
That rolled beautifully off my tongue.
Amazing work. :happybounce: :clap:
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neonsquiggle Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, thank you so much! I intended for it to read that way, really. Your support is greatly appreciated.

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KJHartnett Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Not a problem, you're most welcome!! :) :huggle:
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WindFragments Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
"we didn't know it sometimes helps
  to chain your monsters up and call it art" :heart:

Beautiful as always :love:
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neonsquiggle Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks dear, your support is much appreciated
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