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It was never just your smile
Or how great it felt to rumple your hair into a mess
And how incredibly intense you looked when you read
Your books full of war and words I didn't understand
It wasn't all about how you could hurt me
So easily it was like you needed it
Or how you could destroy my will with your razor-edged words
And kiss away my tears with your faintly smirking lips.
[It was you and your way of intoxicating me
Making me want you so badly I couldn't save myself
From needing your heated kisses and your breath on my neck
So maybe I could make believe you really did love me.]
~
It was never just your smile
Or how great it felt to rumple your hair into a mess
And how incredibly intense you looked when you read
Your books full of war and words I didn't understand
It wasn't all about how you could hurt me
So easily it was like you needed it
Or how you could destroy my will with your razor-edged words
And kiss away my tears with your faintly smirking lips.
[It was you and your way of intoxicating me
Making me want you so badly I couldn't save myself
From needing your heated kisses and your breath on my neck
So maybe I could make believe you really did love me.]
~
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I think it could stand well enough without the last verse, but that's just me.
Hrm. Could it stand without the last verse? Was the wording too typical?
Did it give off enough emotion? Was it meaningful? Interesting?
Did it work well without rhyme?
Also for the
prompt. (:
Please and thank you. (:
B.
Hrm. Could it stand without the last verse? Was the wording too typical?
Did it give off enough emotion? Was it meaningful? Interesting?
Did it work well without rhyme?
Also for the
prompt. (:Please and thank you. (:
B.
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Wow, I really loved this. I wish I could fave it again. 
To answer your questions:
I think the last verse really added to it, sort of explained the situation more. The wording wasn't too typical, I found the poem to be quite original actually. I think it gave off a lot of emotion and it really held my capture from the first line until the end. And though I usually like poems with rhyme, I think it worked really well without it.
To answer your questions:I think the last verse really added to it, sort of explained the situation more. The wording wasn't too typical, I found the poem to be quite original actually. I think it gave off a lot of emotion and it really held my capture from the first line until the end. And though I usually like poems with rhyme, I think it worked really well without it.