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Maybe it will be
a faded brilliance
(like a dying streetlamp
on a quiet evening)

or maybe it will be
a glamour you
can see straight through
(like the headlights
of a silver Lexus)

But
I will try to always shine
darling,
always shine
for you-

Because
I grew up believing
p e r f e c t i o n
scintillates so, oh so sweetly
(like when on a lonely night
you look up and see
all the rest
of our galaxy)

and you, my love, you are
breathtakingly brilliant
(think supernova)

So forgive me for wanting
to glimmer if only for now-
(it's just that
I don't think
my unsparkling flaws
are the kind you could fall in love with)

I would always wish
to be the one
who puts light
in your beautiful eyes.
Oh my gosh ugh I don't even like it much but oh well, that's what you get when you want to write while you've got a concussion.

Class starts tomorrow. Wish me luck.

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xChancex Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Sorry, I'm awful at full critiques, but I really like the pieces you put in parenthesis. They sound like memory flashbacks or something, which makes it even more beautiful to read. Love it!
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neonsquiggle Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No, that's okay, I'm awful at them too. :heart:
Thank you so much though! They were meant to be something like that.
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